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Shadowofthedead
25-Apr-2007, 06:30 PM
tell me something... i always did good in english class in high school but never really put those twisted skills to my favorite genre of horror. so my friends... i need some help throw me out some one liners for the beginning of a decent story... a sentence... a phrase... anything will do. i will credit the person of the one liner i choose i just need some help in gettin the creative juices flowin... thanks...:elol:

Exatreides
25-Apr-2007, 07:58 PM
"I tried my best to stop the bleeding, I really did."

"There once was a man from nantucket..."

rightwing401
25-Apr-2007, 10:52 PM
"When we first heard of the murders we thought it was buisness as usual."

"Being the only thing alive in a world of death makes one want to embrace the reaper."

"The heads never explode the way they did in the movies."

"Every meal tastes like **** because you can't escape the putrid stench of death in the air."

That's about the best I can do. Personally, if you let us know the basic plot and story outline, particularly when and where in the outbreak the story takes place, the one liners can be narrowed down.

deadpunk
29-Apr-2007, 05:31 PM
"This is what happened."

"By the time anyone realized what was happening, it was too late."

"It all fell apart so quickly."

"This is the beginning of the end."

lol...I actually have a story posted here that opens with the line:
"I have to pee."

kortick
05-May-2007, 07:18 PM
they say human flesh tastes like deer


i never thought things would turn out like this

pretty soon the barricade will crumble

never listen to a beatiful girl when she says she will do anything for you

wyvern1096
07-May-2007, 11:52 PM
"Mike, that's one hell of a bad storm rollin' in!"

I coughed weakly and wiped the blood out of my eyes.

Aw, ****, this is gonna hurt.

Shadowofthedead
08-May-2007, 12:09 AM
i dont have an outline or where the story takes place... it just comes to me all at once... i dont like plannin things... i feel my creativity goes to waste if i have to think about the shizit...

wyvern1096
10-May-2007, 10:53 PM
This never happens in the movies.

The sound of the hull-breech alarm jolted me out of a deep sleep.

wyvern1096
12-May-2007, 01:18 AM
Everything was going fine, then the grenade went off.

GhostWolf
16-May-2007, 04:00 AM
This never would have happened if my rifle hadn't jammed.

FoodFight
16-May-2007, 04:45 AM
Shadowofthedead wrote:
i always did good in english class in high school

Maybe if you did 'well' in English class instead of 'good'....

Anyhow, it's tough to write a story around a line or an opening scene. A solid plot will keep the scenes from being disjunct, but if you can pull it off, by all means, go with the one-liner to start the story.

deadpunk
16-May-2007, 04:47 AM
Yet, I see his point.

The opening line can often make or break a story. You only get one shot to make a first impression.

Graebel
21-May-2007, 03:27 PM
"There was rain falling in Seattle."

(I did use this in a short for a writing class. This one sentence caused 45 minutes of discussion/rabid argument.)

"I thought your whole life was supposed to flash before your eyes."

"Violence ran him down like a dog."

Shadowofthedead
22-May-2007, 01:54 AM
thanks deadpunk thats the edge i needed now off to work ill see you kids in a month with a story

SgtSteve
22-May-2007, 02:14 AM
The opening line I really like that I am using in one of my stories is: "The first memory I have is of my mother screaming."

Neil
22-May-2007, 08:03 AM
The opening line I really like that I am using in one of my stories is: "The first memory I have is of my mother screaming."

Nice :)

deadpunk
23-May-2007, 04:27 AM
You only get one shot to make a first impression.

thanks deadpunk thats the edge i needed now off to work ill see you kids in a month with a story

LOL...that wasn't really even a suggestion, but hey...Glad to be of service, man. :evil:

dracenstein
14-Jun-2007, 11:00 PM
"This never happened in the movies!"

"Uh, my back-up has fainted, my gun is empty and I just pissed my knickers, so why don't you just surrender?"

"Where's Superman when you need him?"

"Where's Batman when you need him? Holy Crap, I'll take Robin, the Boy Blunder if I must!"

boblord
09-Nov-2007, 06:45 PM
i like this one(was an opening sentence of a book i read): "Oh **** Oh **** Oh ****"

panic
10-Nov-2007, 01:04 AM
Miguel died first.

"They're dead. They're all messed up."

/p