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    Just been bitten Shadowofthedead's Avatar
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    need some advice for a story

    tell me something... i always did good in english class in high school but never really put those twisted skills to my favorite genre of horror. so my friends... i need some help throw me out some one liners for the beginning of a decent story... a sentence... a phrase... anything will do. i will credit the person of the one liner i choose i just need some help in gettin the creative juices flowin... thanks...

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    "I tried my best to stop the bleeding, I really did."

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    "When we first heard of the murders we thought it was buisness as usual."

    "Being the only thing alive in a world of death makes one want to embrace the reaper."

    "The heads never explode the way they did in the movies."

    "Every meal tastes like **** because you can't escape the putrid stench of death in the air."

    That's about the best I can do. Personally, if you let us know the basic plot and story outline, particularly when and where in the outbreak the story takes place, the one liners can be narrowed down.

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    "This is what happened."

    "By the time anyone realized what was happening, it was too late."

    "It all fell apart so quickly."

    "This is the beginning of the end."

    lol...I actually have a story posted here that opens with the line:
    "I have to pee."

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    they say human flesh tastes like deer


    i never thought things would turn out like this

    pretty soon the barricade will crumble

    never listen to a beatiful girl when she says she will do anything for you

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    "Mike, that's one hell of a bad storm rollin' in!"

    I coughed weakly and wiped the blood out of my eyes.

    Aw, ****, this is gonna hurt.

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    keep them comin

    i dont have an outline or where the story takes place... it just comes to me all at once... i dont like plannin things... i feel my creativity goes to waste if i have to think about the shizit...

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    This never happens in the movies.

    The sound of the hull-breech alarm jolted me out of a deep sleep.

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    Everything was going fine, then the grenade went off.

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    This never would have happened if my rifle hadn't jammed.

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    Shadowofthedead wrote:
    i always did good in english class in high school
    Maybe if you did 'well' in English class instead of 'good'....

    Anyhow, it's tough to write a story around a line or an opening scene. A solid plot will keep the scenes from being disjunct, but if you can pull it off, by all means, go with the one-liner to start the story.
    Colonel "Bat" Guano: Okay. I'm gonna get your money for ya. But if you don't get the President of the United States on that phone, you know what's gonna happen to you?
    Group Capt. Lionel Mandrake: What?
    Colonel "Bat" Guano: You're gonna have to answer to the Coca-Cola company.

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    Yet, I see his point.

    The opening line can often make or break a story. You only get one shot to make a first impression.

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    "There was rain falling in Seattle."

    (I did use this in a short for a writing class. This one sentence caused 45 minutes of discussion/rabid argument.)

    "I thought your whole life was supposed to flash before your eyes."

    "Violence ran him down like a dog."
    A penny for the old guy.

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    You only get one shot to make a first impression.

    thanks deadpunk thats the edge i needed now off to work ill see you kids in a month with a story

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    The opening line I really like that I am using in one of my stories is: "The first memory I have is of my mother screaming."
    I meant retard in a nice way.

    The only french you need to learn is, "I accept your surrender.

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