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mista_mo
16-Sep-2008, 01:30 PM
Hi folks,

Basically, I ran with this idea on Andy's forum, about homepage of the dead being this hellish, nightmarish place populated by all manner of demons, devils, and the souls of the damned. I have a short section written out right now (very "pre alpha stage) that covers Neil and Andy. I hope to re-write it, and to try and keep a serious tone to it (as serious as I can be with this anyways). Basically, the 1st section is going to be on the true nature of evil (I will be suffering to Scipio's thread for some ideas on the matter), then followed by a Description of Hellpage of the Dead, which in turn will be followed by Descriptions of the overlords (Neil and Andy) then followed by the Mods, and then followed by active, notable members.

Basically, I need ideas on how everyone should (and would) like to be portrayed in this. I have a few in my head which I'll jot down shortly, but would like some input from the members of this establishment.

To sum it all up, I have this silly idea in my head about how homepage of the dead is hell, and the roles and occupations everyone will play in it. I really want to write it as a...journal type thing, where the author has seen the horrors of hell, and is haunted by the demons and images he has seen.

Note, This isn't something I'm doing to hate on anyone, or show anyone in a negative light. It's all in jest, and I'm doing it for fun.

I hope that wasn't too long of a read, and I hope to see some member input here. Any idea (as long as it is constructive) is welcome here.

Bub666
16-Sep-2008, 03:06 PM
If this is hell,then who would be the devil?This is a really cool idea.

AcesandEights
16-Sep-2008, 04:14 PM
Mo, sounds like a really fun idea! Please follow up on it, even if it's a short version.

I can't wait to see how many people you offend...

:evil:

Andy
16-Sep-2008, 11:32 PM
I Have a short excerpt from this which covers me in my signiture, i like it :D

clanglee
17-Sep-2008, 12:40 AM
Sounds like an interesting idea. Hmmm. . .just dont throw me into any boring circles of hell.

mista_mo
17-Sep-2008, 12:37 PM
Well, I figure I should show you the "pre-alpha build" of this. This was the little bit that started it off. Originally, I wanted it to start off as a less serious piece, but I couldn't help it, and I made it a little more on the serious side.

I'm gonna fix this up and flesh it out though, so yea. Thanks for the support guys.


let me tell you of HPOTD.....

It was forged by Lucifer in his great hell furnace, the forums sub structure hammered out by the Great hell forge hammer that the great hell smith uses to craft the diabolical machines of hell. Great demons constantly wander it's blackened plains, keeping a hellish vigil for any foolhardy trespassers that dare enter the infernal abode of the damned. Brimstone constantly rains down from the blood red sky, scorching the earth, and the wails of the damned carry across the dry wind.

The land constantly shifts and changes position, edifices open up and swallow entire cities, while sometimes the sky rains blood and ichor. A great spire juts in the middle of the largest landmass, home to the great Satan himself. None know his True name, and he goes by many aliases. Many call him The Blackened soul, others the immoral Englishman...

But Most simply Call him.......NEIL.....
His Demonic number is 6


He has a great many lesser demons (compared to his great power and cruelty anyways), who are known as the greater demons Of Neil. Each one of them has a small faction of their Gods power, and controls a separate domain in Hellpage of the dead. Above them Is the great Destroyer- The being that evokes such primal fear in a being. He Goes by the modicum of "Andy". His presence is felt far more then that of his chaotic overlord, and as such, is probably the most dreaded member of Neils Hell Kabal. He routinely butchers and tortures the souls that reside in HPOTD in the most cruel and unimaginable ways possible.

For these reasons he is also known as the Carver. His demonic number is 7.

I...I can hear them calling to me as I write this..Their gurgling voices are calling out to my very soul...I...I can feel the cold tendrils of their presence in my heart...The voices of the damned are calling out to me...telling me the fun we will have together in the labyrinths underneath the spire...of all the exquisite pain that will be visited upon me...The rot of undeath that will be given to me....th-...
I can stay no longer, for fear of their arrival....

Neil
17-Sep-2008, 01:15 PM
This reminds me of the fiction contribution about when the site was down for a while, and that it was infact 'the dead' kidnapping me to cover up the fact they actually existed...

clanglee
17-Sep-2008, 08:30 PM
Oh ho ho hoooo:lol::lol::lol:

Good stuff there Mo!!

EvilNed
17-Sep-2008, 08:49 PM
If this means that the site will actually be updated, then I'm in full support! No offence, Neil. :p

dracenstein
17-Sep-2008, 09:30 PM
I like it.

Bub666
18-Sep-2008, 03:25 AM
That is some great stuff Mo.

mista_mo
18-Sep-2008, 06:10 PM
a new bit that is classified as still "pre alpha". This time, the focus is on one of the fine staff here, I'll leave it as a surprise though, too try and get ya too read it lol.

Pretty quick right up, hope it ain't too bad though. Undergoing revision at some point (after I get the others down and finished) This one isn't even finished though, and i plan on adding a lot more to this little bit. It may seem a bit disjointed in places, but again, I'm gonna fix it up later.

"Everyone derives some form of pleasure in most activities they partake in. From the simple feeling of accomplishment for a job well done, to the physical bond 2 people can share with one another, will cause the partakers to feel some form of pleasure. Even those whom would be thought of as sadistic and debased garner pleasure from their favorite activities. It is an inescapable aspect of this life, and is one of the most compelling emotions a person can feel. However, too much pleasure can dull the senses; rendering the party to seek out new and more decadent ways to fulfill their bliss. It may take years, but eventually the feeling of satisfaction and well begin is replaced with the rawest of human emotions- that of anger. Unable to reach the state of bliss they were once able to grasp so easily drives even the stoutest and most formidable person insane, and drives them forever foreword down a a path so decadent, murderous, and sexually immoral that it destroys that person, and those closest to them. The Demise of the individual isn't always the outcome, nor is it always the wanted outcome. The mental destruction of the strong willed, and the morale degeneration of the godly, and restrained is often the desired outcome.

This is the doing of a being who continually pushes the boundaries of pleasure, one who can command the very desires and fantasies of the mortals that walk the plane of light, and take away that most base of human emotions- Joy and Bliss. He is the Greater demon of earthly Desires, the ultimate pleasure seeker, and the patron deity of the sexually liberated, the gluttons, the greedy, and those brave few who wish to push the boundaries of the senses as far as they can go.

He goes by many aliases. Pleasure seeker, the Eternal Watcher, the Lord Of decadence, and the Herald of Bliss. His true name is known to all but the highest ranked in the hell Kabal, but he is refereed to as "MinionZombie" by those who study the dark arts. The very utterance of his true name causes those who hear it too fall to the ground, and writhe in agony. Their heart begins to pound in their chest, and all the blood in their body grows thin and water like. Pleasure receptors in the brain go hay wire and begin to send out their signals randomly, filling the body with blissful agony. Every fantasy becomes reality, and it is as if they experience every pleasure all at once. The human body can only take so much of anything- even pure unbridled bliss- before it shuts down and ceases to operate. The process the individual undergoes looks and sounds horrifying, their body convulsing in ways the human body cannot, their voice gaining a quiver, and their wails and screams filled with the voices of the damned. Indeed, any who witness such an event would be driven away; their mind filled with images so horrifying that they dare not think of them again.

Minion gains much satisfaction whenever someone utters his name."

darth los
18-Sep-2008, 07:42 PM
a new bit that is classified as still "pre alpha". This time, the focus is on one of the fine staff here, I'll leave it as a surprise though, too try and get ya too read it lol.

Pretty quick right up, hope it ain't too bad though. Undergoing revision at some point (after I get the others down and finished) This one isn't even finished though, and i plan on adding a lot more to this little bit. It may seem a bit disjointed in places, but again, I'm gonna fix it up later.

"Everyone derives some form of pleasure in most activities they partake in. From the simple feeling of accomplishment for a job well done, to the physical bond 2 people can share with one another, will cause the partakers to feel some form of pleasure. Even those whom would be thought of as sadistic and debased garner pleasure from their favorite activities. It is an inescapable aspect of this life, and is one of the most compelling emotions a person can feel. However, too much pleasure can dull the senses; rendering the party to seek out new and more decadent ways to fulfill their bliss. It may take years, but eventually the feeling of satisfaction and well begin is replaced with the rawest of human emotions- that of anger. Unable to reach the state of bliss they were once able to grasp so easily drives even the stoutest and most formidable person insane, and drives them forever foreword down a a path so decadent, murderous, and sexually immoral that it destroys that person, and those closest to them. The Demise of the individual isn't always the outcome, nor is it always the wanted outcome. The mental destruction of the strong willed, and the morale degeneration of the godly, and restrained is often the desired outcome.

This is the doing of a being who continually pushes the boundaries of pleasure, one who can command the very desires and fantasies of the mortals that walk the plane of light, and take away that most base of human emotions- Joy and Bliss. He is the Greater demon of earthly Desires, the ultimate pleasure seeker, and the patron deity of the sexually liberated, the gluttons, the greedy, and those brave few who wish to push the boundaries of the senses as far as they can go.

He goes by many aliases. Pleasure seeker, the Eternal Watcher, the Lord Of decadence, and the Herald of Bliss. His true name is known to all but the highest ranked in the hell Kabal, but he is refereed to as "MinionZombie" by those who study the dark arts. The very utterance of his true name causes those who hear it too fall to the ground, and writhe in agony. Their heart begins to pound in their chest, and all the blood in their body grows thin and water like. Pleasure receptors in the brain go hay wire and begin to send out their signals randomly, filling the body with blissful agony. Every fantasy becomes reality, and it is as if they experience every pleasure all at once. The human body can only take so much of anything- even pure unbridled bliss- before it shuts down and ceases to operate. The process the individual undergoes looks and sounds horrifying, their body convulsing in ways the human body cannot, their voice gaining a quiver, and their wails and screams filled with the voices of the damned. Indeed, any who witness such an event would be driven away; their mind filled with images so horrifying that they dare not think of them again.

Minion gains much satisfaction whenever someone utters his voice."


Dude, i love the way this is coming along. Keep it up. We're here to support you. :thumbsup:

capncnut
18-Sep-2008, 08:12 PM
Indeed, it is pure Mo-etry. :D

darth los
18-Sep-2008, 08:19 PM
Indeed, it is pure Mo-etry. :D

I can't wait to see where he goes with this. maybe we could join forces to battle an even greater evil that threatens our domain?Dude, that could be epic. Just throwing it out there. :sneaky:

mista_mo
20-Sep-2008, 12:34 PM
okay, a bit of an update.

I'm currently continuing on with the minion zombie aspect of this. Still gotta complete that little part i posted, but I also wish to add something new. I thought of this while I was at work, basically, I want to add experiences that people have had with the mods/devils. I plan to write it in a predominantly first person POV, and as if it was a first hand experience/journal entry that the writer of the hellpage of the dead project as a whole has snapped up in his travels.

My idea is that an archeologist/explorer has stumbled upon a temple dedicated to the worship of Minion, and proceeds to document his findings on the strange structure. I have a vague idea of the inside (ornate and elaborate, walls decked out in murals and paintings depicting pleasurable activities which intensify and grow more disturbing as he proceeds through the temple. I want to make it feel as if he is being toyed with and watched; the documenter being documented if you will. Progressively, the very temple will seem alive, it's walls pulsate and shift constantly, forming new patterns, and indeed, showing the explorers inner fantasies. As he proceeds further into the temple, the walls begin to show increasingly disturbing images. The explorer killing and mutilating his family with a large, inhuman grin on his face. The explorer mutilating himself, and trying to alter his physical appearance with whatever means necessary. As he gets closer to the inner sanctum, his rations begin to taste bland, When he drinks his water, he doesn't feel as if his thirst is quenched, and his senses begin to dull as his surroundings start to appear more and more bizarre (walls change color from bright pink to black, statues and sculptures have a bright aura to them, the water dropping from the roof appears blood red, and the smell of lilacs and roses enters his nostrils).

He is compelled to keep moving deeper and deeper into the temple, due to the unholy energy about the place corrupting him subtly, making him want to experience all the sensations that the place can give him.

Still not sure what happens to him when he reaches the end, but i hope to think of it soon.

Well, what do ya think? also, I plan on doing CapnCnut after Minion, followed by Kaos.

capncnut
20-Sep-2008, 02:21 PM
Sounds great, Mo. I'm liking you ideas quite a lot.

Yojimbo
21-Sep-2008, 09:04 PM
Note, This isn't something I'm doing to hate on anyone, or show anyone in a negative light. It's all in jest, and I'm doing it for fun.

I hope that wasn't too long of a read, and I hope to see some member input here. Any idea (as long as it is constructive) is welcome here.


MistaMo, you write beautifully, sir!

Don't know if I rank high enough as a member to be included in your epic, but if I do then you certainly have my permission to include me -- it would be a great honor to be featured as a character. Go ahead and make me evil and contemptible if you want, again it would be nothing short of an honor.

BTW: It's OK, too, if you choose not to use me. I'm not insisting on it, and truly do not mean to tell you what to write or how to write.

Cheers to Mista Mo!

Usumgal
12-Nov-2008, 08:38 PM
This reminds me of the fiction contribution about when the site was down for a while, and that it was infact 'the dead' kidnapping me to cover up the fact they actually existed...

What story is this?

Neil
13-Nov-2008, 08:12 AM
What story is this?

I can't remember :( Someone?

fartpants
12-Feb-2009, 06:50 PM
this sounds like a great idea