Dommm
19-Jul-2006, 02:05 PM
Hello all, just trying to write a full story but I aint sure how it is going and am looking for some feedback, if any of you kind people would be willing to give it. Most of the inspiration for it comes from 28 days and notld (more 28 days) and the dotd remake (still favour the orignal though), well here goes
no title as of yet playing with a few though
Prologue
Charles walked through the automatic door. All the doors in this place had advanced technology that read access privileges from a chip entered into the skin of each researchers body, each chip was specifically designed so that the only the person with the correct genetic sequence can activate it, and then only get access to areas with the correct clearance. Charles was a short bald man with flaky skin, pot belly, IQ of 190 and zero personality, in fact the only two ways that he ever managed to pick up a girlfriend was a on an pre-paid nightly basis or one which was as lonely as him (a rare case).
Charles had been searched out by the MOD for his specialisation in Cell structure and genetic recoding; he was called in for a secret project to reanimate dead cells within a host. As he wandered around the lab shaking a test tube here or there and looking at the various charts showing progressing changes in each of these vials he remembered the day he had gotten a phone call at the small research facility he had worked at, previous to this position. The phone call had come one morning saying they would quadruple his salary if he came in on a project with them. Three short days later he had turned up to a briefing at a military base outlining that they wanted to create soldiers that could heal quickly on the field to the point that they could rapidly grow replacement limbs.
He was now in the process of combining this chemical to a genetically restructured version of the HIV that activates when the host is injured, thus healing them from almost any injury. So far he hadn’t managed to perfect it, as any person or animal that he injected with it went crazy after two or three hours attacking anyone coming near them. These creatures’ hearts stopped beating but brainwave activity continued, any attempt to harm them almost instantaneously healed, you could only stop them through destroying the brain, and this did not entirely work as if the brain was not substantially damaged they would rise again a short while later. The question he kept asking himself was there was no heartbeat therefore blood was not flowing so how did the healing occur.
As he was getting to the end of his checks he heard loud explosions from another area of the building, his eyes rapidly moving as fear debilitated him.
Uncertainties
Jeremy woke to the sound of Kiss fm on his radio, the sunlight streaming through a gap in the curtains across his eyes momentarily blinding him; he stretched his toes out as he swung his legs round laying his feet on hardwood floor. Grimacing at the fact that he had to wake up to go to work he flung the curtains open to the view of the high street outside his house, ‘at least it’s a nice summers day outside’, he thought to himself. As he reached for a towel he wandered if Susan would be at the Bus stop today, he had been dreaming about her since he had started college collage 6 years ago but had never even spoken to for the 2 years he was there. In-fact he had only started speaking to her after he met her at his most recent job as a cook at the local pizza shop, it turned out that she also had started working there with her dad a year so earlier, and they had become good friends since, but he still hadn’t worked up the guts to ask her out. They would often meet at the bus stop as she had rented a place just two minutes from his own decrepit rented flat. He walked down the hallway making his way to the bathroom, his feet rushing over the cold floorboard, he couldn’t believe how it could be such warm weather and yet the floor still so cold. As he climbed into the shower he glimpsed himself in the mirror, seeing his messy brown hair deep penetrating black eyes square cut jaw he still couldn’t see that Susan might just feel the same way about him.
Susan was sat in her living room not watching Judy, saying to Richard what she thought of the brash of assaults that had been sweeping London and the surrounding counties over night. Susan munched down on her toast dreaming that one day Jeremy would one day just grab hold of her and kiss her passionately before dragging her off to bed. She had first noticed him in college all those years ago and had always thought he was cute, albeit a bit shy. She had throughout her time at college tried to get his attention on many occasions with him running off just as it seemed he was about to talk to her. Susan had in the end given up when they finished college, but then about 4 months ago he had started working at her dads’ pizza parlour and this had renewed hope of an opportunity with him, especially as they had developed a strong friendship almost as soon as he had started working there. She had soon come to realise that he liked her in return but was just to shy to ask her out, she hoped he would get over this soon as she did not want to be the one to initiate the new level to the relationship. She finished her breakfast and slapped the power button on the television. She did not notice the words news flash jump across the screen as the TV went off. She wandered towards the door moving long shapely legs and well rounded rump hidden in a pair of jeans a small tight blouse that tightly hugged against her well rounded breast, she had a nice hourglass figure that seemed to challenge men as she walked all this with a pretty face, brown hair and brown eyes set on top, it was easy to see why Jeremy wanted her so bad.
Jeremy ran down the stairs leading out of his flats as he had just spied Susan walking past his flat out of his window, it had just past half past ten in the morning, so they would be just in time for the bus and hopefully for the 11 o clock shift start.
Susan Deliberately slowed down as she walked past Jeremy’s flat in the hopes that he wouldn’t have already left and would walk with her to the bus stop, ‘every moments meeting was the extra moments chance that he would ask her out’ she thought to her self as she heard the flat door slam. She smiled hoping that it would be him and not that twat from the floor above him that would come running out.
‘HEY SUSAN, HOLD UP GIRL’, Jeremy shouted as he ran up behind reaching out a hand to tap her shoulder.
‘Jay do you have to shout so hard’, she said laughingly ‘hurry up we gotta get to work u know how my dad hates tardiness’. So saying she gave him a brief embrace and turned and started walking to the end of the road and the bus stop.
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Sweetcorn, extra cheese, garlic sauce on a margarita base Jeremy read of the screen as he spun the base on his hand giving it that round shape to the pizza base expertly he slapped it on top the pan and spread the tomato sauce and the cheese evenly over the surface. He rested his hands on the flour covered worktop, as he felt a sudden squeeze of his ass; he blushed and turned round to a smiling Susan wearing her happy pizza gogo hat that even she couldn’t make look good.
“hay handsome, pizza the only thing you can cook or you have any other hidden talents”.
“W..Wh..Why don’t you come round tonight and I’ll see what I can do to impress you” Jeremy blushed, as he realised that he had just asked her out on a date and suddenly became deeply worried, ‘what if she says no’ he thought to himself. Seconds stretched out into hours, he thought about burying himself alive to die a silent screaming death at the possibility of a negative reaction.
Susan looked at him shocked as she realised he had just asked her round to his for dinner as a small smile spread across her face, widening as Jeremys blush became deeper. Thinking she had better accept before he backed out she quickly replied.
‘We both get out at five so I’ll meet you round yours at 8 and you can show me some of your skill’, she winked at him before abruptly turning round and walking off.
Jeremy stood shocked for a few minutes before a sudden wide smile spread across his face. He went back to his work humming a little…
…As they neared three o clock, Jeremy wandered where all the drivers were though he had no pizzas to be delivered and the last guy had left over half an hour ago.
‘Susan where are all the guys gone? We aint’ heard from em in over alf an hour’.
‘Strange huh and the phones are dead as well I just tried calling them, what you think…’
…at that moment the radio blurted out an announcement in the middle of my humps by the black eyed peas.
no title as of yet playing with a few though
Prologue
Charles walked through the automatic door. All the doors in this place had advanced technology that read access privileges from a chip entered into the skin of each researchers body, each chip was specifically designed so that the only the person with the correct genetic sequence can activate it, and then only get access to areas with the correct clearance. Charles was a short bald man with flaky skin, pot belly, IQ of 190 and zero personality, in fact the only two ways that he ever managed to pick up a girlfriend was a on an pre-paid nightly basis or one which was as lonely as him (a rare case).
Charles had been searched out by the MOD for his specialisation in Cell structure and genetic recoding; he was called in for a secret project to reanimate dead cells within a host. As he wandered around the lab shaking a test tube here or there and looking at the various charts showing progressing changes in each of these vials he remembered the day he had gotten a phone call at the small research facility he had worked at, previous to this position. The phone call had come one morning saying they would quadruple his salary if he came in on a project with them. Three short days later he had turned up to a briefing at a military base outlining that they wanted to create soldiers that could heal quickly on the field to the point that they could rapidly grow replacement limbs.
He was now in the process of combining this chemical to a genetically restructured version of the HIV that activates when the host is injured, thus healing them from almost any injury. So far he hadn’t managed to perfect it, as any person or animal that he injected with it went crazy after two or three hours attacking anyone coming near them. These creatures’ hearts stopped beating but brainwave activity continued, any attempt to harm them almost instantaneously healed, you could only stop them through destroying the brain, and this did not entirely work as if the brain was not substantially damaged they would rise again a short while later. The question he kept asking himself was there was no heartbeat therefore blood was not flowing so how did the healing occur.
As he was getting to the end of his checks he heard loud explosions from another area of the building, his eyes rapidly moving as fear debilitated him.
Uncertainties
Jeremy woke to the sound of Kiss fm on his radio, the sunlight streaming through a gap in the curtains across his eyes momentarily blinding him; he stretched his toes out as he swung his legs round laying his feet on hardwood floor. Grimacing at the fact that he had to wake up to go to work he flung the curtains open to the view of the high street outside his house, ‘at least it’s a nice summers day outside’, he thought to himself. As he reached for a towel he wandered if Susan would be at the Bus stop today, he had been dreaming about her since he had started college collage 6 years ago but had never even spoken to for the 2 years he was there. In-fact he had only started speaking to her after he met her at his most recent job as a cook at the local pizza shop, it turned out that she also had started working there with her dad a year so earlier, and they had become good friends since, but he still hadn’t worked up the guts to ask her out. They would often meet at the bus stop as she had rented a place just two minutes from his own decrepit rented flat. He walked down the hallway making his way to the bathroom, his feet rushing over the cold floorboard, he couldn’t believe how it could be such warm weather and yet the floor still so cold. As he climbed into the shower he glimpsed himself in the mirror, seeing his messy brown hair deep penetrating black eyes square cut jaw he still couldn’t see that Susan might just feel the same way about him.
Susan was sat in her living room not watching Judy, saying to Richard what she thought of the brash of assaults that had been sweeping London and the surrounding counties over night. Susan munched down on her toast dreaming that one day Jeremy would one day just grab hold of her and kiss her passionately before dragging her off to bed. She had first noticed him in college all those years ago and had always thought he was cute, albeit a bit shy. She had throughout her time at college tried to get his attention on many occasions with him running off just as it seemed he was about to talk to her. Susan had in the end given up when they finished college, but then about 4 months ago he had started working at her dads’ pizza parlour and this had renewed hope of an opportunity with him, especially as they had developed a strong friendship almost as soon as he had started working there. She had soon come to realise that he liked her in return but was just to shy to ask her out, she hoped he would get over this soon as she did not want to be the one to initiate the new level to the relationship. She finished her breakfast and slapped the power button on the television. She did not notice the words news flash jump across the screen as the TV went off. She wandered towards the door moving long shapely legs and well rounded rump hidden in a pair of jeans a small tight blouse that tightly hugged against her well rounded breast, she had a nice hourglass figure that seemed to challenge men as she walked all this with a pretty face, brown hair and brown eyes set on top, it was easy to see why Jeremy wanted her so bad.
Jeremy ran down the stairs leading out of his flats as he had just spied Susan walking past his flat out of his window, it had just past half past ten in the morning, so they would be just in time for the bus and hopefully for the 11 o clock shift start.
Susan Deliberately slowed down as she walked past Jeremy’s flat in the hopes that he wouldn’t have already left and would walk with her to the bus stop, ‘every moments meeting was the extra moments chance that he would ask her out’ she thought to her self as she heard the flat door slam. She smiled hoping that it would be him and not that twat from the floor above him that would come running out.
‘HEY SUSAN, HOLD UP GIRL’, Jeremy shouted as he ran up behind reaching out a hand to tap her shoulder.
‘Jay do you have to shout so hard’, she said laughingly ‘hurry up we gotta get to work u know how my dad hates tardiness’. So saying she gave him a brief embrace and turned and started walking to the end of the road and the bus stop.
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Sweetcorn, extra cheese, garlic sauce on a margarita base Jeremy read of the screen as he spun the base on his hand giving it that round shape to the pizza base expertly he slapped it on top the pan and spread the tomato sauce and the cheese evenly over the surface. He rested his hands on the flour covered worktop, as he felt a sudden squeeze of his ass; he blushed and turned round to a smiling Susan wearing her happy pizza gogo hat that even she couldn’t make look good.
“hay handsome, pizza the only thing you can cook or you have any other hidden talents”.
“W..Wh..Why don’t you come round tonight and I’ll see what I can do to impress you” Jeremy blushed, as he realised that he had just asked her out on a date and suddenly became deeply worried, ‘what if she says no’ he thought to himself. Seconds stretched out into hours, he thought about burying himself alive to die a silent screaming death at the possibility of a negative reaction.
Susan looked at him shocked as she realised he had just asked her round to his for dinner as a small smile spread across her face, widening as Jeremys blush became deeper. Thinking she had better accept before he backed out she quickly replied.
‘We both get out at five so I’ll meet you round yours at 8 and you can show me some of your skill’, she winked at him before abruptly turning round and walking off.
Jeremy stood shocked for a few minutes before a sudden wide smile spread across his face. He went back to his work humming a little…
…As they neared three o clock, Jeremy wandered where all the drivers were though he had no pizzas to be delivered and the last guy had left over half an hour ago.
‘Susan where are all the guys gone? We aint’ heard from em in over alf an hour’.
‘Strange huh and the phones are dead as well I just tried calling them, what you think…’
…at that moment the radio blurted out an announcement in the middle of my humps by the black eyed peas.