need some advice for a story

[Neil]

The opening line I really like that I am using in one of my stories is: "The first memory I have is of my mother screaming." Nice

[deadpunk]

You only get one shot to make a first impression. thanks deadpunk thats the edge i needed now off to work ill see you kids in a month with a story LOL...that wasn't really even a suggestion, but hey...Glad to be of service, man.

[dracenstein]

"This never happened in the movies!" "Uh, my back-up has fainted, my gun is empty and I just pissed my knickers, so why don't you just surrender?" "Where's Superman when you need him?" "Where's Batman when you need him? Holy Crap, I'll take Robin, the Boy Blunder if I must!"

[boblord]

i like this one(was an opening sentence of a book i read): "Oh **** Oh **** Oh ****"

[panic]

Miguel died first. "They're dead. They're all messed up." /p