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    Quote Originally Posted by OddDNA
    I am ready to send my work to all people who wish to read.

    Things to keep in mind:

    There is only 20-something pages of the story which would need about 200 to be complete.

    This is a "true" sequel to Dawn of the Dead.

    This was written before I heard the plot of LOTD.

    I tried to stay true what I thought GAR's vision would be.

    I wrote this for my pleasure solely.

    It takes place 20 years after Dawn which some people will not like.

    But other than that I think it is pretty good.

    This was my 1st attempt at writing anything that was not a school assignment.

    I am open to any and all critisism, errors, mistakes and I will not take them personly, like I said I am not a writer so I dont expect to be without error.
    GREAT I cant wait to read it!

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    Well it is sent out...

    There are some spacing issues, I tried to fix them but I might not have done a great job. I had to convert between formats by cutting and pasting and it spaced it all wrong.

    Feel free to post whatever you like about the story, I look forward to hearing from you.

    If anyone else would like to read just ask.

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    Format conversion can be a pain, especially if you don't have the software to support it. I have a few disks of old stories that come out all messed up in Word, and I just don't have the time to go through and re-align and--more annoying--patch and replace the text.

    I just polished off a good book last night, and--even though I have other book in the que--I await your story patiently.

    "Men choose as their prophets those who tell them that their hopes are true." --Lord Dunsany

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    Geez....

    It's queue not que....que is spanish for what LOL.

    Now you have fodder to nail my spelling errors.

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    Quote Originally Posted by OddDNA
    It's queue not que....que is spanish for what LOL.

    Now you have fodder to nail my spelling errors.
    You suck I almost went to dictionary.com to double check my spelling (I always mispell that word), but didn't bother.

    You're going to get it now

    PS--I probably also mispelled mispell, a word I, ironically enough, always spell incorrectly.
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    I am ready for the next few chapters. Get to typing man. LOL

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    Ill take that as a positive review?

    Yeah my hobbies are going to be only Poker, Drinking and the story for the next month or so.

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    Quote Originally Posted by OddDNA
    Yeah my hobbies are going to be only Poker, Drinking and the story for the next month or so.
    Poker? I didn't even know 'er.

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    Critique

    Okay, trying for honesty here, so hopefully this is helpful.

    I liked it. Read all three chapters. Thought the action was happening a little too fast. I would have liked to see more in the camp. More Fran and Peter interaction, and maybe a little bit more about how the doctor got all the info about Trixie. Where did they go to get it from? Etc.

    But otherwise, I thought you really did a nice job. Descriptions were good and I think Roger's interaction with Peter was spot on.

    Thanks for letting me read. I would love to see more.
    A penny for the old guy.

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    Liked it. Want more, so get to work
    The trixie explanation, at the start, seemed a bit confused.
    Chapter 3 starts off in a confused way. Showed up for what? Turns out the meeting, but should be more apparent quicker.
    Liked thr Roger namesake. and "Trooper that was good.
    Good Stuff. Looking fowrad to more.
    The Barbara Lox bit was good. Good to keep Biker lifestyle realistic instead of ignorant sterotyping. Been around plenty and while some are goons, many are not.

    More are "normal"(sorta) than many would think

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    Seven Bloody Hells! I did not receive my copy yet

    Let me know if you did not receive my email when I replied to your PM via my email account (still not sure how well that works).

    "Men choose as their prophets those who tell them that their hopes are true." --Lord Dunsany

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    Quote Originally Posted by coma
    Biker lifestyle realistic instead of ignorant sterotyping. Been around plenty and while some are goons, many are not.

    More are "normal"(sorta) than many would think

    Not Bikers as much as raiders...they are supposed to be rough around the edges, it was purposeful but they could of just as easly showed up on skateboards. Just Motorcycles are an obvious choice for anyone leading a nomadic lifestyle. No commentary is about bikers or bikes or locksmiths

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    I emailed my opinion...loved the first 3 chapters so get busy with the rest..loved the storyline. I would like to see more story on Fran and Peter.
    GOOD LUCK!!

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